Mobile phones or the Internet is more important to my life?

Comparing mobile phones and the Internet, I think mobile phones play a more important role in my life for the following three reasons.

First of all, mobile phones can be brought wherever I go. As I have no notebook computer, I cannot access to the Internet outside home. However, I can use the mobile to chat with friends anywhere at any time. Thus mobile phones is more convenient than the Internet.

Besides, I start taking snapshots after I have a mobile phone with photo-taking function. Bringing a camera out is too troublesome for me. As I already have too much things to take care of when I go out, I did not bring a camera with me in the past. However, many of today's mobile phones have embedded cameras inside. I can just bring a mobile phone to chat and take photos. It is just like killing two birds with one stone.

Lastly, my parents allow me to go out more often because of mobile phones. The most important thing that mom and dad care is my safety. With a mobile phone, I can tell my parents where I am, and my parents, at the same time, can find me when necessary. With the 3G technology, we can even see each other in mobile phones. They do not need to worry about me when I am out.

It is for the above reasons that mobile phones is more important to me than the Internet. Thanks for the invention of mobile phones!

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